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People rarely influence me because I have my own mind and don’t allow a lot of people to get that close to me although there is one that has made me the way I am today. That one person that has influenced me a great deal is my grandfather. When I was a little boy he was always there to pick me up when I was having problems in school and at home. My grandfather is probably the strongest member in my family. He really holds all things together. I say this because whenever somebody needs something in the family and even in the community he is the person that people flock to. He is also the kind of person that would give his last dollar to you if it mint that he wouldn’t be able to obtain what he wants. All his life he’s been a workaholic doing what he had to do to support his seven kids and wife working as a truck driver. He’s always had a side hustle like working on lawn mowers, cars, buying cars at auctions and selling them, things like that. Ever sense I was young I would be around him at every chance I could and it also helped that we live in the same neighborhood. But I was seeing him so much that I would get him and my dad mixed up and call him dad because I would spend more time with him then my real dad because he was at work a lot. Everything he would do and wear I would want to do the same because he’s a great guy. Most of my traits and habits I get from him like hunting and fishing. In my family, everybody knows that if they can’t get through to me or I just don’t listen to them, that I would listen to him. I’m now the handyman now in the family since he has become ill. Given that he’s became ill he has became weaker and can’t do things like he once used to and it hurts him deeply. Now it’s my turn to return the favor that he gave me when I was younger and weaker. All the things that he once cherished like hunting working on small engines and just being out in the sun I am now able to allow him to do so. But with all this going on he is now becoming much better and
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strong again. Allowing my whole family including me to spend another great day with him my grandfather.

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People rarely influence me because I have my own mind and don’t allow a lot of people to get that close to me, although there is one that has made me the way I am today. That one person that has influenced me a great deal is my grandfather. When I was a little boy he was always there to pick me up when I was having problems in school and at home. My grandfather is probably the strongest member in my family really holding all things together. I say this because whenever somebody needs something in the family and even in the community he is the person that people flock to. He is also the kind of person that would give his last dollar to you if it meant that he wouldn’t be able to obtain what he wants. All his life he’s been a workaholic, doing what he had to do to support his seven kids and wife, while working as a truck driver. He’s always had a side hustle like working on lawn mowers, buying cars at auctions and selling them, things like that. Ever since I was young I would be around him at every chance I could, and it also helped that we live in the same neighborhood. But I was seeing him so much that I would get him and my dad mixed up and call him dad because I would spend more time with him then my real dad because he was at work a lot. Everything he would do and wear, I would want to do the same because he’s a great guy. Most of my traits and habits I get from him like hunting and fishing, painting cars, and the way I act. In my family, everybody knows that if they can’t get through to me or I just don’t listen to them, that I would listen to him. I’m now the handyman in the family since he has become ill. Given that he’s became ill, he has became weaker and can’t do things like he once used to and it hurts him deeply. Now it’s my turn to return the favor that he gave me when I was younger and weaker. All the things that he once cherished like hunting working on small engines and just being out in the sun I am now able to allow him to do so. But with all this going on he is now becoming much better and strong again. Allowing my whole family including me to spend another great day with him my grandfather.

http://www.msnbc.msn.com/id/21134540/vp/27452762#27452762

eng 111 reflection

Everybody that I have talked to always said English 111 was easy and a breeze, they lied. Well they might have had it easy in their 111 class but this one was not as easy as they said. Paul is a cool ass teacher but doesn’t go for any BS. The papers all had to be 900 words or more which was new to me because my other 111 teacher only made us write 600 word papers. The things I really thought was cool were that he was actually teaching and you have to do all the work he gives you. He is an understanding guy that can and will relate what the work curriculum into everyday things to keep you interested . Many people dropped out of the class because it is very demanding class that you can’t fall behind in. You can miss some classes but it is critical that you catch up by either calling him or calling a friend because the schedule can and will be changed on a regular basis. For the first part of the semester I was like this class is the easiest in the world because all you had to do is read books, watch movies and have class discussions. At the beginning of the year, he gives you all of what you have to do and the due dates in the class syllabus. If you don’t keep up with it you will end up doing like I did and do it at the last minute and barley getting it done on time. I would have to say this class is not for a lazy person due to the amount of work that you have to put into this class at home. When I walked into this class I didn’t really know what to expect to learn because I learned the mechanics in Eng3 when I took it so I just had to go with the flow. What I did learn is the rhetorical appeals about writing, Pathos, Ethos, and Logos. Pathos appeals to emotions, Ethos appeals to audience’s view of the speaker and subject, and Logos appeals to a person’s reason. Another thing I learned was how to watch a movie and write notes about them with meaning and understanding. The rhetorical appeals really helped me with writing with meaning and emotion rather than just writing. Writing has always been somewhat easy to my it’s just the little things like what to write about, how to start a paper n so on but now that I know how to write with meaning I am able to write longer papers with little stumble because all you have to do is use the appeals he taught you. Overall the class was fun and intriguing, getting you out of the box and interacting in front of a group of your peers with no problem. So if you are looking for an easy class were you won’t work much, this isn’t for you. But if you want to learn take his class.

Animal Farm

Animal Farm is very interesting story about how farm animals overruled their human master. It all started when the farm owner forgot to feed the animals because he got drunk one night. The next day when the farm hands came out to get the animals they started a rebellion. All the animals busted out of their stables and chased the humans of the farm and the farm was finally theirs. They celebrated the victory for a couple of days before getting down to business about how to keep the farm in order and who is the new leader. The pig’s voluntarily pronounced that since they were the smartest they should be in charge of the farm. Every animal on the farm agreed with that decision and the two main leaders were Napoleon and Snowball. Napoleon and Snowball never agreed on anything at all including on the rules of what the animals should do. Snowball was always for the pig that was doing what was best for the animals and farm and even came up with the idea of making a windmill to help with farm work and put heat in the stables for them. Napoleon eventually drove Snowball off the farm and blamed everything that had happened on him. He later on started manipulating all the animals to do what he wanted them to do like build a wind mill, pick more crops and eventually grow barley which was used to make alcohol for the pigs. There was one horse that was thought to be as strong as all the farm animals together. He was always agreeing with Napoleon and eventually wore is body down by doing extra work without being ask to. One day when the horse was in the stable Napoleon sent for the horse butch to come and get him. Little did they know that they were going to kill him. After that Napoleon held a meeting with all the surrounding farmers and drunk and played cards like they were humans as well. In the end the animals turned out to be just as bad as and worse than the original farm owner ever was.

http://www.ingilizcenet.com/novels/animal_farm.html

Shitty first draft

Everybody has to write papers whether they are in school or at work. With writing papers, everybody writes a shitty first draft of a paper, first drafts are meant to be nothing but crap. They are used to get the thoughts that you have on your brain out on paper so you can properly organize the things you want to put in the second draft. Many great writers don’t just sit down at a computer and type one copy and it is done and read to be published. Hell, I don’t think anybody can do that. When I start writing or think about writing I get side tracked and start watching TV. When I do start writing I get tired very quickly and start writing crap and take a break. When I do get up and take a break it’s like I was never tired. By the time I do get settled and start writing it at least takes me three copies before I get a paper as perfect as I think it can get. The reason most people don’t like writing is because they get discouraged if the first draft comes out bad. The best way for me to actually just sit and write is to do it under pressure with music playing. My technique may only work for me but it might for some others. So just because your first draft doesn’t come out nearly as good as you want it you shouldn’t get discouraged and just sit and revise your shitty first draft.

Palins appeal to white women

Governor Palin, when announced vice president candidate for McCain, was thought to be the turning page in McCain’s party. Palin was supposed to persuade Clintons votes toward them. Most of the voters that Clinton had were white women that palin was supposed to try and get before they converted to presidential candidate Obama. . When Palin first was brought into the race a lot of Clintons votes did go to her but as soon as she started with odd ball debates and people realized she was not well informed, the votes went back to Obama. Palin appealed very well to working class moms and stay at home moms because she is a mother of four herself. With her being the governor and a mother, a lot of women thought she could relate to their problems. Sarah would pop up at random kids soccer, and football games to interact with the parents to show that she is just like them. A lot of women thought of her as paving the way for feature females as being the highest female in politics giving them a voice. Although Palin might have been loved by many white women, she was also disliked by many feminist. Many feminist do not agree with the picking of palin because they did not think she was capable of the job. Even though she was something new and exciting she lacked the knowledge and experience that is needed for a position that demanded so much time effort and knowledge. Now that a lot of the dirt on palin came out, it even changed some of the views of the mothers she once had, but instead turned out to be the complete opposite. She may have ended up causing Mccain to lose the race.

http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/americas/7617411.stm